Huck Finn: And why I think the N-word should remain in the novel. Rebutting: “Huck Fin: Censorship? Sure, it is, but changes to ‘Huckleberry Fin’ are warranted”
Mark Twain was a scholar who wrote The Adventures of Tom Sawyer and The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn. When Mark Twain was writing these two pieces of work he used the N-word to reveal the dirty culture of the South at the time of the story. He did not use the N-word to offend anyone and he used the word in the proper manner. Many people today dislike the word because it is used so often and taken advantage of, where as most people do not know the actual meaning of the word.
Although the book does say the N-word over two-hundred times and it is the fourth most banned book in the United States is what Delia Lloyd explains (N-Word Controversy. Par.5). Lloyd wrote an essay for “Politics Daily” on the Web which explains that when you censor famous pieces of work for the General education it loses all sense of history behind it. There was also an editor of the 19th century that created a family version of “Shakespeare” that removed all sex scenes so it did not offend the Victorian wives and children (N-Word Controversy. Par.7). If you have to change the vocabulary to make the language more appropriate for the reader then maybe the reader should wait until they are at an age where they are mature enough to read the work and understand it in the correct terms. The editorial that I am refuting the author says “We don’t blame elementary school educators for holding back the original versions of “Huckleberry Finn” and “Tom Sawyer” based on the language” (Editorial. Par. 3) If they are changing the language for elementary schools that ridiculous because they are already to young to be reading this book to understand what actually is happening. People do not understand racism and discrimination until they are at an older age, such as when they are in high school. Thomas Quirk an English professor stated that if he were a middle school teacher he would not assign the sanitized or un-sanitized piece of literature because of the difficulty to comprehend (Fin Revision. Par.16). The editorial also states that they new version of the literary works is for lower- level grades in the school. If the new novels are for lower levels, why could they not wait until they are perhaps a junior or senior in high school?
If you prefer the historical value of the book it will always be there for the reader to find (Editorial. Par.4). That is not the point that I am trying to make though. It does not matter if someone else likes the historical piece over the new piece it is what the younger generation will think after reading the censored piece of literature. When reading Mark Twain, he wanted people to know what was happening in the south and the harsh punishments that people went through. When changing words people could then misinterpret what Twain was actually trying to say and it could change the whole perspective of the novel. “Changing Twain’s work ‘still does damage to the authorial voice and the historical reality’ of the text” says Peggy Placier (Fin Revision. Par.13). Placier is an associate professor in MU’s College of Education and she had stated that for the Missourian which is the Missouri University newspaper. Quirk also states that the book is not for boys, it is for adults who used to be boys (Fin Revision. Par.17). That is because the book should not be read until you are at the age where you can fully comprehend what is actually going on in the novel and you can relate to the racism of the novel and why the N-word is actually used. If we all listened to Quirk and did not read this novel until the last couple years of high-school or even into college then there would be no need to revise the book. The revision of the N-word is just of that for younger adults who now will not know how a famous scholar like Mark Twain actually wrote.
If you prefer the historical value of the book it will always be there for the reader to find (Editorial. Par.4). That is not the point that I am trying to make though. It does not matter if someone else likes the historical piece over the new piece it is what the younger generation will think after reading the censored piece of literature. When reading Mark Twain, he wanted people to know what was happening in the south and the harsh punishments that people went through. When changing words people could then misinterpret what Twain was actually trying to say and it could change the whole perspective of the novel. “Changing Twain’s work ‘still does damage to the authorial voice and the historical reality’ of the text” says Peggy Placier (Fin Revision. Par.13). Placier is an associate professor in MU’s College of Education and she had stated that for the Missourian which is the Missouri University newspaper. Quirk also states that the book is not for boys, it is for adults who used to be boys (Fin Revision. Par.17). That is because the book should not be read until you are at the age where you can fully comprehend what is actually going on in the novel and you can relate to the racism of the novel and why the N-word is actually used. If we all listened to Quirk and did not read this novel until the last couple years of high-school or even into college then there would be no need to revise the book. The revision of the N-word is just of that for younger adults who now will not know how a famous scholar like Mark Twain actually wrote.
The N-word will be changed in with the word “slave” I find that to be heart wrenching because now when the N-word should have been used it will say the word “slave” and that could be completely out of context. According to the Merriam-Webster dictionary both of these terms have completely different meanings. The word nigger is defined as a member of a socially disadvantaged class of persons, one who may feel completely out of the political process. While slave is defined as ‘a person held in servitude as the chattel of another’. Whenever I hear the word slave I automatically think of an African- American person working for someone else because that is how I was raised and what was taught in school. I do not ever hear the word slave without it meaning to work for someone else. When I hear the N-word it hits me a lot differently then the word slave because I have grown up in a household where that word was inappropriate to use. I represent the N-word with poor African- Americans that most likely live in a ghetto. When the N-word gets replaced with slave I would begin to misinterpret what the text is telling me because now I am thinking that this black individual is working for someone and is not actually a poor man, but just has to work hard to live. That is way different from the N-word because that could mean they are actually poor and do live on the streets where everyday is a struggle. John Hudson who wrote a small essay on this issue stated "Race matters in these books. It's a matter of how you express that in the 21st century” (Censors the N-word.). You have to be able to relate to the past and the issues that we did have in this country, and changing a word is taking the easy way out and not teaching the younger generation what time was actually like.
The N-Word should not be changed with the word “slave” because it leads to misinterpretation of the novel and the Context of how the word is being used. Mark Twain wrote literary works such as The Adventures of Tom Sawyer and The adventures of Huckleberry Finn to reveal the dirty culture of the South and what people every day had to live with. When you remove a word that defines those hard times it is scary to think of what the new context will sound like and how much it will actually change the novel.
Works Cited
Lloyd, Delia. "Huck Finn, Censorship and the N-Word Controversy." Politics Daily Feb,1 2011: Web. 1 Mar 2011.
Hudson, John. "New Edition of 'Huck Finn' Censors the 'N Word'." the Atlantic Wire, Jan, 24 2011. Web. 1 Mar 2011.
Davis, Michael. "MU scholar defends Huckleberry Finn revision." Missourian, Feb, 8 2011. Web. 1 Mar 2011.
The Lufkin Daily News. “Editorial: Huck Finn: Censorship? Sure, it is, but changes to ‘Huckleberry Finn’ are Warranted”. The Lufkin Daily News, Jan, 6 2011.
Web. 1 Mar 2011
Colby,
ReplyDeleteYou have a clear voice in this piece. Your writing is very unique and you have a lot of information at hand to use for this essay.
I, however, was a bit unsure what your claim was. From this confusion, unfortunately, it was hard to understand a majority of your essay. I wasn't sure who this essay was directed to, which editorial it was (I knew because I had read it but, it wasn't clear in the essay), and what the main argument was. Although those sound like crucial points of an essay, they are also easy to fix. I just think the paper could've been more clear on those points from the get-go to allow me to get into your groove of writing.
Something that may help with this may be using your sources more. The sources will allow a sense of grounding to your topic. They will allow you to be more invested in it and focus your energy to back up your opinions. Maybe try and incorporate them more?
Other than that, the rest was simply grammatical or picky points. I really liked how your personality was shining through in this paper. With just a bit of fixing up and clarifying things for the reader, this essay will be much better.
Peggy
Hey Colby,
ReplyDeleteLike Peggy said before me, your voice definitely shines through the essay, which is its strong point.
I like how you get right into your argument in your opening paragraph, but I would suggest mentioning the original article to provide context for your argument. I liked how you didn't necessarily write it in letter format, but because you didn't, you need to let your readers know what you are arguing against. You might also want to make your claim more obvious, perhaps with a couple more sentences in your opening paragraph.
There are also some sentence structure errors that come with this being a first draft and can be easily fixed during the rewrite.
There were a couple times when you were providing background information about your sources and it came across kind of awkwardly. One example is in the third paragraph when you were introducing Placier's source. This can also be easily fixed by simply rewording it.
I'm also not sure how I feel about the part where you use a dictionary definition of the n-word, just because I feel like the whole point of the argument against the original essay is that the n-word doesn't have just one definition. This is just a personal thing though.
Overall, I think you just need to work on sentence structure and maybe incorporating your sources a bit better.
Hey Colb-eeeeeeeeeeeeeeee,
ReplyDeleteThis is Cassie from your academic writing class. You had a pretty solid essay for the most part in my opinion. In your second to last paragraph I thought that you used a very good quote. It fit in nicely to your paragraph and was very specific in supporting your argument. I also thought you had a very strong conclusion. You restated your central argument and wrapped up your paper nicely. It’s hard to write a long conclusion that’s as thorough as yours.
There were a few areas of your paper that could use editing and improvement to make it a better piece. First of all, it was hard to find your thesis statement/ central claim in your introduction. You should try to add a sentence that clearly states what you’re going to be rebutting. Also, in the second paragraph you talk about an “editor of the 19th century” but don’t give a name or any other information on this mysterious editor. In addition, your sentence stating “ People do not understand racism and discrimination until they are at an older age.” seems like an assumption rather than a fact. I’d advise that you either re-word this, of take out the sentence as a whole. Or you could find a credited source that supports this. I noticed too that you used the second person term ”you” a lot in your paper. This would be acceptable if your paper was written in letter format, however, if you’re going to continue writing this as an essay style paper you should try and stay away from using the second person.
In your fourth paragraph you talk a lot about how the taking out the ”n-word” would ruin the genuineness of the book. Yet, your first sentence seems like more of an opinion than a concrete fact. I don’t know that it’s necessarily true that replacing the “n-word” with slave would change the context of the entire book. Maybe you should re-think how to present that argument.
Other than these few quarks, I felt your essay was good. All you need to do is some grammatical corrections and re phrase a few arguments and you should have a great paper.
See you tomorrow!!
Cassie
Colby,
ReplyDeleteYou bring up some very good points in your essay, and it is clear how you feel about this topic. Great job providing some background information about Mark Twain, and the novels he is known for writing. All of this extra information helps the reader to better understand the context of the argument.
I also noticed that you bring up a lot of valid points in your essay, but then you tend to keep repeating these same ideas throughout the paper, even if they're off topic. Be careful to thoroughly discuss each of your claims before you move on to your next ones. Your ideas are good, just make sure they get the attention they deserve.
When incorporating sources, be sure to tell your readers who these people are and what their credentials are. Get as specific as possible. This will only enhance your argument.
I also recommend that you utilize transitions to help your paper flow nicely from one idea to the next.
For your conclusion, it looks as if you copied the same points in your opening. You can really use the conclusion to your advantage by summing up your ideas, and reminding your readers of everything they just read. Be sure to tie up and loose ends, and make sure you've stated everything you wanted in order to have a thorough rebuttal.
Good luck on your final draft!
--Francesca
Colby,
ReplyDeleteyou have a very strong voice about your topic from the beginning, which is great. Also, you have a lot of evidence to back your claims and reasons up with. My main recommendation on for revising lies in the structure. First of all, even though you have a strong introduction, I would mention the article your rebutting at the beginning. Also, I had some trouble figuring out what exactly your claim was and this really took away from your paper.
If you can explain your claim a little more clearly in the introduction and then base the rest of your structure around that, I think you could end up with a really great paper. Really sticking to that claim will help the structure out a lot. If you can figure that out, then I think your evidence and reasoning will really shine through. Other than that, be careful of run on sentences. I know it might be nit picking, but there were a lot of sentences that could have been broken up into two or three. Breaking these up will help the reader heavily which will end up making your arguments and essay as a whole a lot stronger.
Hope this helps, cheers
-Drew
Hey Colby,
ReplyDeleteI really loved how you maintained a strong voice throughout the essay. I definitely felt that you have a strong opinion about this topic, which gives your paper more power.
One thing I did have a little trouble with was your claim. It didn't come across very clearly from the start which made it a little hard to connect all of your points. A bit more of an explanation in the very beginning should fix that right up. Also, I think a little more from your sources would help reinforce your points. Be sure to include as much information about each source as possible.
Other than that there were a few technical errors like sentence structure and point of view uses.
Good job! Good luck on your next draft.
Justine
Colby,
ReplyDeleteoverall this was a very strong first draft. You had very specific assumptions that you refuted with good evidence to support it. I especially liked the second to last paragraph in your essay. Explaining the difference in the meanings of "Slave" and "nigger" definitely caught my attention, and I'm sure others of how different those words actually are. the fact that one would misinterpret what the novel is actually saying by switching the words is a very good point to bring up that others may simply look over. the first two sentences in the third paragraph was also something that stood out. It showed your strong voice in this argument and was a great way to start that paragraph.
There are some things that I think you should check over, however. In the introduction paragraph, there wasn't a clear thesis/claim (like many others have said). Also, there isn't background about the original article, which I would recommend to put something in the essay about. The sources you use support your argument as sufficient evidence but I would use the sources more, they will only add credibility. One last thing is the conclusion. Although effective, it is simple and could use something new that wasn't necessarily mentioned in your essay.
Hope this helps!
Rachel
Colby,
ReplyDeleteYour opening was a bit confusing for me. I think you do a good job giving context to how the n-word was used in Huck Fin but you do not explain to your audience that this paper is focusing on an article. You also lack a thesis and any explanation outlining what you are going to talk about in your essay.
I like your use of outside sources in your second paragraph but I was a bit confused. You brought of the article you were refuting but maybe you can give the context (title, author, where it was published). You also gave a quote on the issues of censorship but I felt your argument of “if you are not old enough to understand the language maybe you should wait till you are” seemed a bit haste and out of no where for me. Maybe you could work on your transitioning. You give nice quotes but I think it would strengthen your argument if you explain them afterwards.
“If you prefer the historical value of the book it will always be there for the reader to find (Editorial. Par.4). That is not the point that I am trying to make though. It does not matter if someone else likes the historical piece over the new piece it is what the younger generation will think after reading the censored piece of literature.” I’m not exactly sure why this quote is there... maybe you should take this part out. I think your argument would be a lot stronger because I think what you are trying to convey in your third paragraph is that any change can rewire what the book is trying to convey. I think you begin to deter fro your point when you reiterate your second paragraph claim in your third paragraph.
Your fourth paragraph seems to be the strongest. I think you shed a difference light exclaiming that the two words have different connotations and meanings. I think this is good first draft but needs a bit more organizing and better flow. You enforce your sources credentials by explaining them, but some of the explaining seems a bit awkward.
Colby,
ReplyDeleteYou have some great ideas in your essay and a great start to a powerful essay. However, there are many times while reading your essay that I was confused due to unclear wording, incomplete thoughts, and a number of grammatical errors. There are also a few things I would consider for your final draft:
(1) You thesis is a little unclear and also contains a major generalization, that "most people do not know the actual meaning of the word." I really don't think that is true. I'm sure most people do know the meaning of the word. What I think you mean, instead, is that many people do not know how emotionally charged the word is or what exactly its historical context and role is.
(2) I noticed a second generalization, that "people do not understand racism and discrimination until they are at an older age." I think this statement could have a little bit of truth to it, but not enough to make such a strong claim. Perhaps contextualizing the specific age to which you are referring would make this clearer?
(3) You have some faulty reasoning: "if the new novels are for lower levels, why could they not wait until they are perhaps a junior or senior in high school?" It feels like what you're trying to say is that the books are for lower levels (which is not true) and they should be for an older audience. The way you worded it, however, doesn't clearly show this relationship. Reword this argument to really get your point across.
(4) There's one source that you use that looks like a quote within a quote. Circumvent confusion by finding the original source.
(5) I really liked your idea of the perception of the novel as literal term discrepancy misconception, but that paragraph needs a lot of clarification and to give credibility to the source you chose (John Hudson).
(6) Your very last line seems to have no relation to the rest of your essay...use the conclusion as an area for extended discussion of your thesis. Restate your thesis and provide new information that you made clear in the body of your paper.
-Matthew Fisher
Colby,
ReplyDeleteAll though you have a strong opinion which helps you clearly convey your point of view, I found your essay a little jumbled. You should reorganize your intro so you have a more focussed thesis statement, once you do that it should become easier to organize your ideas and formulate a more flowing essay. I thought the third and fourth paragraphs were your strongest and helped strengthen your argument but they could still use some work.
I think you should look back over the quotes you used because they are lacking in relevance. Even when you paraphrased the quotes seemed mostly irrelevant to the topic and you barely elaborated on them. Also the paper has a lot of technical errors but this is only a rough draft.
Joe Walker
Colby,
ReplyDeleteYou have a very strong point of view. Your essay starts out strong with the introduction but then gets a little unclear with your supporting evidence. Your arguments on the historical aspects of the book and how schools should wait until students are old enough to read Huck Finn could be interrelated more and can be supported with more examples. You have very good arguments however try to formate a more organized paper with your arguments and examples.
Courtney Roome
hey
ReplyDeleteoverall this was a really nice first draft. Your claims were very specific and refuted with great evidence to support it.
Your second to last paragraph that explained the difference between "nigger" and "slave" was great. It was something that I never thought anyone with the same article as you, would do.
One of the few things for you to check out, is maybe your introduction paragraph, making it a bit longer. Maybe looking over your thesis once more to see how you can make it better.
One thing that I did poorly on, is introducing my sources, or like giving background info on them, so maybe if you do that as well, it would only make your essay stronger.
Also, maybe making your conclusion a little stronger, like others said in class today.
Besa
Colby,
ReplyDeleteOverall your essay on Huck Finn shows good direction and great potential. You have good ideas on refutations and some good evidence to back that up.
There were a few negatives, however. There were many grammar issues that made sentences confusing and really distracted the reader. There was also a few fragments that you included that made the paper seem incomplete.
Organizationally, you include a lot of peices of evidence from both of your supporting reasons in both supporting paragraphs. To make your paper more conducive, maybe go back and outline all the sentences you have or ideas you have and rearrange some of them. Lastly, include a stronger claim in your introductory paragraph.
Alex D.K.
Odd, I just realized that my response was on here, I know I definitely typed up one for it, I guess something went wrong with the captcha. I loved your reference to the revised Shakespeare play in your paper, but like others I thought your claim wasn't all it could've been.
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